Saturday, 24 March 2012

Five Sentence Fiction- WICKED



What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction. (http://lilliemcferrin.blogspot.co.uk/)
This week: WICKED
Although the sky was pitch black and desolate, the horse galloped confidently through the winding, rugged hills with its rider clinging on, shielding himself in the mane from the swirling wind. His pursuers had dropped back long ago, the sound of hooves and rifles no more; but the rider couldn’t relax until he reached his destination.

The flickering , dimming light in the distance gave off a warm glow of safety and refuge as the rider began to relax and the horse slowed to a casual trot. Patting the horse gently and turning off the warning lantern, the rider walked into the dilapidated building and saw his partner waiting in the darkest corner of the room, a single candle burning lower, the only light. Tipping a small, black velvet pouch onto the table, small, shining stones, belonging to the King, tumbled out as the Highway Man smiled knowingly.



22 comments:

  1. Mmmm ... a highwayman is the loveliest kind of wicked! :)

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    1. Thank you Ruth!!! I like to think so. xxx

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  2. So glad you have joined in the five sentence challenges! I find these are great writing practice and also helpful in starting to explore ideas that might be used in longer pieces. Think you did a great job with setting the scene, really felt the situation - the night and the desperation. I wonder what happened to the King?!

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  3. I kind of like my Highway Man too; why do we like those characters that are so villanous and wicked? As for the King? Well if the song is correct 'Stand and deliver, your money or your life', I'm sure he survived his encounter . . .
    Thanks for the comments :-). Can't wait for the next challenge. xx

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  4. Thank you for joining! I really like this! And, that last sentence leaves so many questions that I'm certain have many interesting answers :) Great job!!

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  5. Thank you chick. I like to give a reader questions as it means usually, they want to read on which is awlays good. I mentioned it to someone at work and she wants to see my piece as a posibility to introduce to her class. I think it'll get the creative juices flowing. xx
    PS I want to do another one! xx

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  6. Enjoyed this. Good contrast between the action of the 'flight', and the 'reveal'
    of his trawl. Thanks.

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    1. Thank you for you comment and taking time to read. I'm so pleased you liked it; it inspires me to do more. xxx

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  7. The atmosphere of this is amazing. For a few moments in time I was no longer surrounded by screaming 8th graders. I was following this night rider and his steady steed. I've always loved the mystery and danger of highway men and you did that romantic ideal a lot of justice. A complete story in five sentences---I'm floored.

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    1. Thank you for your commnet. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I can't wait to write another. To be honest, I was inspired by the poem 'The Highway Man' which we are studying in class so I can't take all the credit. xx

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  8. great idea, lizzie, can't wait to read more! ;)

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  12. I remember this!!!! Oh my gosh. Only a year and a bit ago. And we are doing the Highway man again in year 5 this week coming up and last week. I don't understand why my comment from last year isn't here. Anyway yep I loved this when I read it back then and still do.xxxx

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    1. I thought you'd commented too; maybe it was on my facebook page? But yes, the Highwayman strikes again in Year 5 and I still love it. Thanks honey. It's one of my favourite pieces and it's in Katie Button!!! xxxx

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    2. Yes it is in Katie Button!!! Love it.

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  13. You can't go wrong with a Highwayman! If this was your first piece, then you've always been a natural! Love it Lizzie x

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    1. Thank you Lisa. Yes, my first flash. . . .I had the poem of same name as my muse; year 5 literacy and just love the romanticism. xx

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